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AMOC Timeline In case anyone's curious, I've finally put together a rough timeline of what happens on what day in my story. Modeled after Kodu's story timeline, doing this has really helped me understand what's happening when. I also wish I'd done it earlier, because it's helped point out weird pacing mistakes I made, especially at the beginning. I think I knew, but didn't really realize, that I had all of the alliance proposal stuff happen in just one day. Bad Jenn...
Timeline Day 1 (Saturday, starts early morning) Ambassador from Suna approaches Shizune about alliance exchange Shizune takes proposal to Tsunade Tsunade considers ramifications of alliance, decides to offer choice to Sakura Sakura and Naruto spar, Shizune asks them to see Hokage immediately Suna ambassador and Tsunade propose alliance exchange to Sakura, she refuses Sakura goes to work at hospital Sakura summoned to help with gravely injured Kiba Kiba dies, Sakura flees hospital, runs into Naruto who comforts her, takes her to office Sakura tells Naruto and Tsunade all that happened, reconsiders alliance with Suna and accepts
Day 2-3 (indefinite passage of time) Temari and Kankuro discuss Konoha’s alliance acceptance, take proposal to Gaara Gaara considers proposal, accepts Suna and Konoha negotiate alliance, Sakura put under guard
Day 3-7 (indefinite passage of time) Sakura feeling emotionally lost, Shikamaru helps pack her things to prepare to move Sakura breaks down crying, Shikamaru misspeaks and says he’ll go with her Shikamaru goes to Tsunade and asks to be a part of the exchange, she accepts Neji has already demanded to be a part of exchange, Tsunade accepted too Tsunade goes to Neji and Shika’s families and explains about exchange, Neji’s curse unsealed Tsunade asks for volunteers for last member of exchange, Shino volunteers Preparations are finalized by day 7
Day 8 Konoha citizens told of alliance and exchange Sakura helps Tsunade pack her things for trip, Tsunade tells her of expulsion ceremony Going away party with friends, well into the night
Day 9 Sakura awakes hung over, showers and dresses to meet Suna party Hokage and 4 exchange members await Suna party at gates, they arrive around 10am Tsunade greets Gaara, they proceed to the arena grounds Tsunade conducts expulsion ceremony, Gaara honors shinobi for their sacrifice, takes Sakura’s hand Sakura and Gaara walk hand in hand out of arena, Konoha citizens honor exchange members with flowers Party leaves Konoha gates, Gaara shows Sakura and Shino how to ride, Suna and Konoha caravans leave Sakura and Gaara talk a bit, Gaara shows her how to ride more Caravans camp for the night, Sakura bunks with Ino, writes in her diary for first time
Day 10-11 Traveling brings them to border of Fire and Wind country (great plains) Caravan attacked, Sakura injured, horse killed (Gaara shields caravan from arrows, Tsunade uses jutsu to expel ninja out of ground to be attacked) (Naruto rescues Sakura, takes her to Tsunade, Gaara shreds enemy with sand needle storm attack)
Day 12 Sakura unconscious, caravan proceeds on, much slowed by members forced to walk Tsunade treats Sakura’s fever and wounds
Day 13 Sakura wakes up in afternoon, Tsunade explains what happened Sakura rides with Gaara, members take her place in caravan, caravan hurries on Sakura heals self while riding with Gaara Caravan travels into the night, nears end of plains, Gaara apologizes for not protecting Sakura
Day 14 Caravan reaches rocky plateau, travels across, stops at edge of desert for short rest (at sunset) Sakura heals self while riding, but still weak, Gaara helps her to bedroll
Day 15 Gaara awakens them at 2am to travel through night and into morning Caravan makes camp in wadi (around 10am), Gaara shelters them with sand over crevasse Sakura helps Gaara with horse and water, sits down to talk to him Gaara allows Sakura to lightly examine him, Sakura almost gets sucked in by demon Gaara awakens party (around 6pm and proceed to Suna, Sakura rides with Gaara still
Day 16 Caravan traveled through night and reaches gates of Suna around 11am next morning Sakura asks Gaara about Suna and its history Temari greets party at gates
Something else I've been thinking about as I talk the story over with my friend - the cast of Naruto is huge, and even the number of people I had wanted to have in the caravan to Suna was overwhelming, so I think I have to limit myself to just Sakura and Gaara's perspectives in the future. I've kinda been doing that already, but now at least I can move forward with that firmly in mind. I love the other three exchange members to death, but I don't think I can tell their story while also telling the story of Sakura and Gaara, it's just too overwhelming. I started this story with the idea that it would be good practice in writing a coherent storyline, and I'm certainly learning a lot! Like, start with a small cast of characters, and move forward with them as you feel comfortable.
Current Location: bed, writing on laptop... Current Mood: sleepy Tags: amoc, timeline
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